I am posting some of the comments I have received on parts of the manuscript to date:
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Something bit meAuthor, there is something here. Your writing has a restless kind of energy that sweeps the reader along. Another major plus point is your knowledge of rugby - some of your moves are so cool!
Good luck
Dominic
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Great read...very interesting! This should be your query and sent out to agents if you haven't done that already. Love it!!!! Thanks for sharing too!!! Lee Foster from twitter
21 comments:
"You have the gem of a storyline. You live in Africa and know the place and customs/culture (irrespective of whether they are basic or poor). A paranormal romance with the backdrop of Africa has an appeal".
What a great book with a market potentials!
I really enjoyed the shock-factor of your work and the way it plays on an unusual type of addiction.
From what I have read, and what I glean from your work, you have an amazing talent. I think what you are doing is pregnant with potential.
Your work is good and certainly should be published. Don’t stop writing or looking for a publisher.
I wish you well with it and that you create a great following and make millions.
A very colorful story, nice discriptions of all the characters, their actions and their surroundings.
I love dark fantasy and I think you've got a lot of potential.
The idea for the story is good and I am sure that if I were to see the whole picture it would all fall into place.
I enjoyed this, and I am glad your friend in London liked it and encouraged you to publish.
An interesting story of the transition of a young woman from human state to vampire, told from the first person point of view and with a strong emphasis on evolving sensory perception. Despite the proliferation of vampire-orientated novels at the moment, this take on the classic tale of metamorphic transformation is original. Setting the story in South Africa also gave it an exotic twist that adds spice to the mix. The voice of the main character was well defined, and provided depth to the tale.
Firstly, I'd like to say that I really liked your inclusion of the definitions for "addiction" at the beginning, it perfectly sets the scene for your story where a woman is depicted turning into a vampire for the first time. The theme and ideas aren't highly original as the "turning into a vampire story" has been done many times over. However saying that, I was won over by the unusual setting of South Africa, I loved how you painted the picture of the heat and the landscape of the cities Raven finds herself in. I've read many vampire novels in the past and I don't think I've ever come across an Africaaner heroine in any of them, so I think that will gain you some marks for originality. Most vampire literature these days is set somewhere in America which tends to get monotonous, so well done!
I also think that you did well in describing your protagonist's change into a vampire, her thirst, and how she runs away from her life and can never be the same again.
I found the opening chapters to be engaging and well thought out. I found the charactors interesting and likable and like the rounded picture that the past and present voice gave. The settings i found worked well and i developed a good picture in my mind.
I have read a few vampire based books and this is as good as any i have read, i would be interested to see how the story develops to see how it sets its self apart from the vampire books on the shelves already. because from what i have read so far i get the impression it would.
Anonymous said...
Well done! You have achieved a goal that so few are willing to even try. Hard to believe it's your first one. I like your easy writing style that cancels out long and boring reading. Your use of imagination as well as reality is nicely balanced which makes a good story. Looking forward to the next one.
MM....
Hi,
This is amazing. I am so enjoying your book. Its a great read and I'm so impressed with your Engels!Your vocab is so good and your descriptions are wonderful. I'm so proud of you! Well done!
Wow! This beginning pulled me in and intrigued me immediately. I want to know more about this character's situation. This is a great start. I thought it was really cool and interesting how you had the definition of "addiction" in the beginning. Please tell me when you post more. Oh, and I loved your cover, it kind of made me want to read this as well. Excellent job so far, keep it up! :D
Charlotte
Can't wait.:) Please hurry haha:D
I CAN'T WAIT to read this story! The summary above sounds extremely interesting, and the intro/prologue is, too. I love how you defined addiction in the beginning. Cooliotastic! Oh, and thanks for following me. :-D
You have a lot of contacts, do they help you promote, i really need some publicity tactics. Btw love love love your writing!!!
I was drawn in by the emotional personality of the speaker. Made me connect to the character and want to keep reading.
WOW! What I've read so far had me at the edge of my seat! You paint the perfect picture for the reader! I love it so far! I can't wait to read the rest later on today! It's perfect in one sense that it keeps you wanting to read more to find out what is going on, how it got to the accident and so forth. It truly is coming together wonderfully! You also can feel the emotion attached to that particular situation. Chilling, yet realistic at the same time. Bravo!!!
Wow your writing is truly amazing! Wonderful story-line that flows so naturally and you manage to keep my attention throughout. It's descriptive in all the right places, without too much boring detail. Your pace is right on and well balanced. I am very much looking forward to reading this book once published. As for what I've read so far, this would make a spectacular movie.
I thought the prologue was a very good description of a car crash and the frantic emotions which one would experience with a husband and children trapped in the wreckage.
Main Character – I enjoyed reading this – the thoughts of a vampire not quite comfortable in her skin. I like the way you show how Rogue needs to be in contact with humans and is aware of how she has shared so much of their history. Your main character is one with a lot of potential. The situation, ie, her taking a job in an old folks’ home is intriguing too, so you hooked me enough to read on.
The Beginning – well, I thought this chapter was simply brilliant. It is very well written, if perhaps a bit intense for some readers, but I was just taken along on the tide. Your use of language is exceptional here and certainly contrasts with the prologue.
The Hunt – This chapter improves when you get to the killing of the tiger – fancy choosing a Siberian Tiger for her first kill. Me – I’d have been off to some farm or cattle market, maybe a nice little lamb! Still – your choice makes for a much better read.
This last little bit doesn’t add much to the extract but it brings us back to the storyline of course, and the reader is reminded that Rogue is about to start work in an old people’s home, against the advice of her vampire friends. So, I guess this is a good way to end the extract.
Well, all in all, it was a great read for me. It’s all written in the 1st person narrative, so it doesn’t need to be split up the way it is at the moment. Rogue has flashbacks, and then brings us back to the present day - simple!
Greetings Nadine . . .
I just wanted to thank you for linking Real Vampire News to your site. We strive to bring the community and the world accurate and informative articles about the real vampire community.
Again, much thanks!!!
LadyM
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